The Set Up- First Draft

Untitled from Sian Williams on Vimeo.

This is the first draft of our short film 'The Set Up'. After watching the draft, we realised there are a number of things we needed to change in order to make the film more effective:

• The sound is too full on- we are going to edit the music so it builds up more slowly. At the moment, it is very intense straight away and doesn't give the audience a chance to fall into the story. By using a much slower crescendo, the audience will be lulled into a false sense of security. 
• The idea of an 'intruder' needs to be more obvious- we use the 'unknown phone' and knife to create the idea of an unknown person in the house, however, we have discussed that by using a point of view shot of the intruder coming into the house while the protagonist is upstairs increases tension and will be much more interesting.
• The bathroom scene- was actually filmed during the day, and this is obvious. The scene needs to be re-filmed at night to ensure the continuity of the film is believable. 
• Cuts between shots- need to be smoother in some parts as not to distract from the reality of the film.

With these changes we think the film we be much more effective and engaging, as at the moment tension is somewhat ruined by the sound and disjointed cuts. 

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